Talk:Survival/Island One/@comment-5714891-20130103221320/@comment-5810223-20130104020400

Oh this is nice ^^ Just try to explain later in the book how they got their powers, and reveal Lilly's history as the story goes on. Just another thing, slamming so much characters in those few paragraphs is kinda a lot, so maybe make Lilly meet one of the siblings at a time. I'm not saying it's bad, just putting some advice :) I've had my share of experiences with writing.