Claiming:Camp/Brianna Jade

Name: Brianna Jade

Age:17

Gender: Female

God Parent: Dionysus, Ares, Eros

Mortal Parent: Francesca Jade

Appearance:

Personality: Loves cute things, determined to make everyone cute, rarely serious.

History: Francesca Jade was a charming woman, always the bacheloress, doing one night stands and getting drunk with her friends until she met a man, who introduced himself as Jordan Harding, who of course flirted back when she went for him, or as her friends put it 'hunted him' but after the night was over she couldn't seem to get that man out of her head, she didn't know why, I mean sure he was prettier than most guys she had met but still there was no reason she could have...fallen in love with him, but she wasn't sure, she has never felt this much emotion to someone before.

Eventually she went on with her life, changing her ways, becoming a business woman, steadily getting more and more money than when she was a teenager where she use to always rely on her rich parents money, much to her friends surprise and disappointment. A couple of months she found out she was pregnant and knowing instantly that the baby was Jordan’s, she tried to search for him but he was no where to be found. She eventually had Brianna.

Brianna grew up spoiled; she always got the dresses she wanted, got all the latest toys. But she was dyslexic which put her behind in schoolwork, much to her mother’s disappointment but she loved her anyways. When she was seven she was diagnosed with ADHD a couple of years after being diagnosed with dyselxia, which made her mother quite stressed each time she got a hold of her report card. When she was twelve she was walking down a park like she always does, when a huge monster appeared out of the gardens (hellhound) and tried to attack her but the tree nymphs, seeing the monster and attacked it, killing it but Brianna was knocked out in the process. Though she was spoiled, she never had any friends and use to always play with soft toys or her maid.

She woke up in the hospital, finding out she had broken multiple bones and bruises had already formed. No one believed her when she had explained, not even Francesca did and eventually after Brianna keeping on insisting that it was real she was sent to a psychologist. Brianna hated him on the spot.

Brianna kept on going there but still insisted that the monster was real, much to everyone's annoyance and conclusion that she was too spoiled and just wanted attention. So in the end Brianna stopped going there (much to her satisfaction) but Brianna stopped getting the dresses, her mother eventually sent her off to a boarding school for kids with disadvantages.

She spent four years there at the boarding school, and she was thirteen at the beginning, getting ok marks for a demigod, not making many friends, even there she was made an outcast with the people around her, and when she was rarely attacked by monsters but always failed to fight them off but was always saved by someone dressed in black, and always leaving before Brianna could say a word, but she mostly always got injuries and when she did she just said she tripped, but the resident psychologist was replaced by Brianna's old one, and later on was recognized as a monster (Empusai) that she couldn't fight off but her maths teacher, who turned out to be a satyr, beat off the monster with Brianna's classmate, who also turned out to be a demigod that was going to the school as it was in the school term and the demigod wasn't in camp, but later on he admitted that he was the guy dressed in black.

After the battle the satyr smuggled Brianna out of the boarding school and by using Francesca's bank account (As the demigod was a son of Athena he was able to hack into the account) they could get to camp safely and she arrived when she was seventeen Weapons: A sword and dagger in each hand

Comments
Goddess' gestation periods are shorter than mortals, more like 4-5 months. How did the satyr and the demigod beat the monster?  Have you ever danced with      the devil in the pale moonlight?      -Float        17:46, September 7, 2013 (UTC)

How'd she get through those 4 years (twelve to sixteen) without a monster attack?

That model is currently in use by another user.

Aphrodite's cabin is currently full. Please change some portions of the history in order to suit the next godparent choice. You also have yet to answer how she managed to go for four years with few attacks when it is in those four years (twelve to sixteen) when a demigod's powers kick in. She also would have been unable to fight the monsters with a regular kitchen knife. Add in the fact that she never got proper training, it would be unrealistic to emerge with very few injuries. Also, kindly fix up the last paragraph a bit as it is rather hard to understand.

The model your using, Olivia Holt, is already in use, so you should change it, sorry.

Do you still plan on working on this?

That model is also in use by another user.

Assuming you mixed up the mortal parent's gender. How did she end up breaking bones when you never mentioned her actually getting hurt? The part from when she went to boarding school onwards is really confusing, if she was at the boarding school for 4 years, then she'd be a senior, and a lone satyr couldn't possibly fight off monsters that frequently.

Are you still working on this?

How old is she?

Up at the top you put she's 18, but at the bottom of the history you put that she's 17 when she got to camp, where was she for the last year then? Because she can't already have been at camp for the last year. Also, you are too vague about all these supposed monster attacks prior to 17, if surviving monster attacks were that easy, they wouldn't need camp to begin with.

How could an untrained demigod fend off monsters?

Just fix the gender confusion on the first paragraph. Also, the timeskips seems very long and rather confusing. I mean she spet four years at boarding school and you mentioned that four years later she was still there. Also, please add a little more about her early childhood. Just fix these stuff and you'll be ready to go.

What monster was her old psychologist that it took half an hour before it could be defeated? Also, it says she arrived at Camp when she was 17 but it says in the portion before the history that she is 18. Which is it, then: 17 or 18? Please keep in mind that claims are, essentially, the first time your character is arriving at Camp.