Claiming:Camp/James Raider

Name: James Raider

Gender: Male

God Parent: Athena, Hades, or Hecate

Mortal Parent: Ryan Raider

Appearance: About 5 ft. 10 in. tall. He has shoulder length red hair and deep blue eyes. Has a lean build. Casual attire: White jacket with a hood, black T-shirt, blue jeans, and red&black sneakers. Battle Wear: A white cloak (Just think of an "Assassin's Creed" cloak and hood, but has a slanted belt with the symbol of his godly parent on the buckle.) Still, blue jeans, greek greaves, and a sword sheath on his back.

Personality: He is calm and level-headed, even when under tremendous pressure or serverely angered. He is passive aggressive when angered. Tends to be sarcastic. Is exceptionally smart. He is very adaptable.

History: Athena was watching a mortal battle (In Afganistan) when she noticed James Raider, a 'clear sighted' mortal, and his knack for battle tactics. She watched him throughout his time in Afganistan and granted him her favor. (Such as she did with Odysseus.) She approached him while he was planning for an attack (In the form of a female soldier.) and this is how they first met.

After Ryan Raider was released from active duty, she and he began to date. (Just meeting for a meal or watching a mortal movie kind of dating.) Eventually their minds became so close that she had a brain child (James.) Afte this, Athena felt obligated to inform Ryan of who she was and that their child was a demi-god, and that he would enounter many monsters because of this child. Then she left him to raise the child on his own (Like most of the gods do.)

His dad did his best to raise him. He tought him martial arts starting at 4 yrs. old. James was homeschooled by his dad for most of his life. At age 10 His dad tought him how to use a combat knife. Then he was sent to a school for military children, on a military base. (His dad assumed he'd be a less likely target for monsters there.) James was never able to make personal conections with anyone in his school. He always felt like an outsider and after he turned 12 he stopped trying to make friends. He was able to life his life as a normal kid (except his inability to make friends.) He was able to live his life without any major problems, but that all changed when he turned 13.

James found out about being a demigod when he was 13. After being grabbed and almost kidnapped by a harpy, which he was able to get away from thanks to his martial arts training and the habit he developed of bringing a switch-blade wherever he went. Emediately after this, his dad told him everything about how the ancient greek gods and monsters and all were real. They tried to go on living regular lives for 2 yrs. but were continually attacked by monsters, which were getting increasingly powerful. His most common attackers were harpies. James has been forced to high-jack cars and motorcycles to escape them. When being chased by harpies he usually managed to ditch them in underground areas, such as subway systems and sewer systems. He used that same tactic to escape the stymphalian birds once. He was once attacked by several giant scorpions, quickly finding that he couldn't loose them underground (as that was their element) he  His dad has saved his life multiple times. One such occasion took place in their own home, and was the reason they left for CHB. When James had turned 15, he was cornered by Cerberus in his living room, but his dad was able to distract it by firing a machine gun at it. They were forced to flee and leave their home in ruins after that attack, then his dad sent him to CHB so that he could be safe. James has only been at CHB for 1 week.

Weapons: His primary is a Celestial bronze short sword that was given to him by his godly parent (Athena) on his first day in CHB. In addition to his shot sword he uses curved dual combat knives, which were given to him by his father, and throwing knives, which he bought at a store (and later, in CHB, layers both his throwing knives and combat knives with celestial bronze.) He also uses wooden gauntlets which have built in celestial bronze knives on the forearms that can extend and contract (these blades are unusually flat with a 3 inch width) he made them on his 4th day of being in CHB.

ShadowStrikeV2 (talk) 05:39, July 30, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

 * You will need to go more in-depth on the monster attacks, make it known that they had issues.


 * Please use the monsters from the Monster Encyclopedia, the light ones are the main ones to use during a claim.

Time Waits For No Man.  Come, Let Us Dwell On The Past.
 * Generally, a demi-god should learn about being a demi-god asap after the first monster attack.
 * Please expand on his early life, schooling and anything like that. Go in-depth on his early life.

to add on to what freth said, knives are not proper primary weapons but fine secondary weapons. please use something like a sword or an axe.

A cyclopes for a first monster attack? And at age 14? (most monster attacks for non big three kids happen at age 13) Now that's impossible for an untrained demigod who knows how to use a combat knife and even if he knew martial arts as well. Unless he knew how to use a celestial bronze weapon (no knives, knives are secondary weapons) of some sort, then it could be a possibility but for right now with the things you are using? It's a definate no.

And he is currently 15 I presume? Could you also care to elaborate a bit more when he was 15? Like what monster did he fight at that age? (And for an untrained demigod, I suggest you pick something out of the light section from our Monster Encyclopedia (same with the first monster attack).

I will change it if I absolutely have to, but what's wrong with using dual combat knives for my primary weapon? Annabeth used a knife. I personally would prefer them in a fight to a sword. (I have actually trained with both.) It really is just a matter of preference.

As for the cyclops, I still want that in there (But I will take it out if I have to) so I have changed it to the monster attack just before he leaves for CHB, and his dad helps with that one now. (and, since he's only been at CHB for a week, it's his most recent attack.) I've also changed his first attack to be from a fury instead.

On a side note: I'm curious to know why you got rid of Stygian Iron? It was really cool in the books. And it really sucks that you can't use it in the RolePlay.

ShadowStrikeV2 (talk) 05:38, July 30, 2014 (UTC)

Please don't refuse to change what a a claim worker pointed out in his/her comment unless you think it's absolutely un-true or false. If a claim worker points an issue out, you should do your best to fix your claim to it. Your claim will get nowhere if you do that and it'll just take longer until it will be approved.
 * Please elaborate more on James' early childhood, writing a little about what happened every one to two years.
 * Furies serve Hades in the underworld, they will only attack someone to avenge a crime or if they are sent by Hades.
 * So in regular means, do not use them for monster attacks. Please only choose monsters from those categorized under light for monster attacks.
 * The answer is no for the cyclops, cyclopes are categorized under medium on our wiki and are generally used for quests. In the case it does attack a demigod, it is a child of a big-three god.
 * 14 is a little too late for a child of a non big-three god to encounter their first monster, they usually get their first attack when they are 10 to 13 years of age.
 * Aside from just saying that James was continually attacked by monsters, which were getting increasingly powerful, you need to explain what monsters they were and methods he use during the encounter.
 * If Ryan was not a clear sighted mortal, the mosnters James encountered will appear to him as regular unharmful creatures and he would not be able to help James.
 * Please explain where and/or who James received his throwing knives and short sword from.
 * I am assuming that the combat knife was given to James by his father. Where did Ryan receive a Celestial Bronze weapon, for the combat knife to be fatal to monsters it must be made of Celestial Bronze (which mortals can't easily get their hands on).
 * Please specify that the weapons are made of Celestial Bronze as it's the only type of metal fatal to monsters are are generally used by demigods.

To answer your question on combat knives, knives, daggers, and etc are considered to be secondary weapons on our wiki and if a character is to use such weapon, they need to also have a primary weapon. About Stygian Iron, it was voted on by users on the wiki to do away with Stygian Iron.

I changed the that you wanted changed, and I've made it clear that his dad was 'clear sighted'. I have also changed his first monster attack to be at age 13.

I've also changed his primary weapon to a short sword instead of combat knives, even though it's a stupid thing to enforce and shouldn't matter what my primary weapon is as long as it doesn't give me an unfair edge, but I have changed it because it's not worth getting kicked out for. I'm done complaining now because I don't want to get kicked for complaining too much.

I'm still working on his early life, I'm having trouble with that. If anyone could give me suggestions that'd be great.

ShadowStrikeV2 (talk) 03:18, July 31, 2014 (UTC)

How did the father know James was a demigod? Athena never told him and he isn't a demigod so I don't get how he would know in any way. Please fix that or explain.

I fixed what you have requested, Katty. Athena told him after the child (James) was born.

ShadowStrikeV2 (talk) 20:34, July 31, 2014 (UTC)