Claiming:Camp/Eliza McHeart

Name: Eliza McHeart

Gender: Female

God Parent: (1) Ares, (2) Apollo, (3) Deimos

Current Age: 15

Mortal Parent: Demonica McHeart

Appearance: brown hair and brown eyes, she wears black t-shirts and black camo pants and black boots

Personality: She is kind but rude to people she doesn't even know unless the person is a girl.

History: She doesn't know when her mother and real father met or even how they met, mainly because she never asked her mother and she knew not to ask questions. Her mother is Demonica McHeart, and her stepfather is John McHeart. Her mother and stepfather met in Kansas and moved to new York. She's lived in new York for ten years and in Kansas for five years she was in kindergarten at a school for girls only. Her first monster encounter was when she just started school the person had on a black dress and the person looked normal to everyone else but to Eliza the person looked kinda green. The person was staring at her and there was a look of murder in the person's eyes. The teacher told the person to leave and not to bother any of her students again and the person left. Whenever Eliza went to school she’d always get into trouble with other students and always gets detention for fighting. Eliza is also a lesbian so she only likes to go out with girls. Her mother works at the hospital taking care of the sick and injured there. Her step-dad has no job yet and refuses to get one. Her life has been a little bit normal since then. Eliza never knew she was a half-blood till she stumbled across a monster late one night and it looked at her with murder in its eyes. Eliza manages to escape the monster, but she couldn't see the monster she could tell it was a monster by the way it smelled. She ran home and told her mother that she ran into a stranger that smelled funny. Her mother told her to get in the car. That she was going to a camp that she never even heard of till her mother told her the camp was called Camp Half-blood and that she was going to be safe there. When Eliza got there she stood on the big house porch while her mother drove away in the car and she waited for someone to come see who had just arrived.

Possessions/Weapons: The only weapons Eliza has are her stepdads pocket knife and his bow and arrows.

Signing Your Claim:Cynderheart (talk) 16:35, January 27, 2014 (UTC)Cynderheart

Comments
Okay, first off, before anything i recommend you read the directions.  "Because your my friend,  Seaweedbrain. Any more stupid questions?" ~Annabeth Chase" 

To add on to what my colleague has said, I think that it will be even more beneficial if I tell you what needs to be done. I see that you've made an edit to your history and I commend you for this. However, your claim needs to have several more things in order to be at part with the standards for claiming of this wiki. Let's begin.

Firstly, I will ask that you please include a personality. Tell us a bit about your character. What is she like? How is she around other people? Things like that. Secondly, please have an appearance description for her. That is, tell us what she looks like. You also have the option of finding a picture of a person to be your character's model as to how she looks like. As long as this picture is not watermarked (not copyrighted in anyway) and is not already in use, by all means go ahead, you can use the pic!

That concludes what is missing, but, there are a few things I'd like you to please fix for the history. Could you please tell us a little about how her parents met? Also, when did she get the weapons? I am sure what they are but judging from what I've just told you to improve, it should suffice for now. Thank you for taking the time to make and fix this claim! I hope to see you roleplaying soon! Moodle.

Please could you set it out like; How their parents met, growing up, first monster attack and then going to camp? It would be a lot easier to read and be sure to paragraph