Name: Aurora Todduk
Age: 15
History:
Aurora was born on March 15, 1996. Her mother, Marine, was a wealthy English woman who loved to help others. She often helped out at local retailers and helped them with their flowers. She loved working in the spring and summer. Marine loved to work in any kind of garden. But her favorite gardens her flower gardens or orchards. Before Aurora was born, Marine lived in a small town. She had the prettiest garden, she made the best cookies, she was kind to EVERYONE, and everyone loved being with her.
One day a stranger showed up on her doorstep. He said his name was Zeph, and that he was new to the town, and he had not known where to go. Everyone pointed him to her house. Zeph, who was really Zephyrus, was attracted to Marine because of her beauty and her kindness.
Marine ushered him into her house, and they soon became friends. After a few weeks, they started dating. When Marine got pregnant, Zeph left her with only an address. She cried for days on end. Eventually she came out of her crying state and started to think about her baby girl she was carrying. She didn't know what the address meant, but she knew that she needed to live close to the address. It was in New York.
So whilst Marine was still pregnant, she packed up her few belongings, and took a ship to America and settled in a small apartment in uptown New York. Marine got a job at a small flower shop on a corner. When Aurora was born, Marine took 2 months off, then started working again. She left Aurora with a nice lady, who was in her early thirties, who lived next to her.
Growing up, Aurora was home schooled by the lady. Her name was Rebecca, and she later turned out to be a Demigod of a minor god. Rebecca was often attacked, but she was able to fight the monsters. Aurora's mother never knew. Aurora had a great education and loved to learn.
Aurora's first monster attack was during a lesson in her room when she was 13. Marine was making lunch in the kitchen for her daughter when she heard a window shatter in the bathroom she went to check it out only to see a ‘’Rabid Dog’’ but it was really a ‘’Hell hound’’ but Marine did not know this petrified of the dog she grabbed the nearest thing which happened to be a broom she tried whacking the dog and screaming for her life this angered the Hellhound. It went crazy and started knocking things over to get to Aurora and Rebecca. In the process, Marine was hit in the head with many of the things that were falling. She later died from brain injuries.
Aurora heard her mother scream and so did her tutor they rushed out into the hallway that the bathroom was connected to, only to find a bleeding marine choking and a growling Hellhound Aurora wasn't sure what she was seeing but her tutor knew what was going on and ripped a charm of a bracelet she was wearing unsheathing a CB sword and shoved the blade into the Hellhounds head while it was focused on Aurora who was crying and panicking. Aurora’s tutor explained her parentage and the monster attack and said she needed to keep her for a year or so to train her for her journey to CHB. Rebecca explained that, even though she wanted Aurora to go to CHB, she wasn't ready.
(NINE- MONTHS LATER)
Aurora and her tutor were tending to Marine’s plant shop that Aurora insisted they kept running. They were cleaning some of the pots and planting some new seeds when they heard a mumble outside the door they figured it must be a customer so they opened the door. They saw a horrid woman with winged arms that screeched at them no one else on the street seemed to notice and Aurora got mad at them for their ignorance, but her tutor knew better and threw Aurora away from the door and she ripped off the same charm she had 3 months earlier to reveal a shining brown sword, but she wasn't so lucky as she grabbed it off her arm was sliced by the women or "Harpy's" talon her sword went flying near Aurora. She knew what she had to do. Aurora took the sword and well the Harpy was about to tear into the tutors neck, she sliced the Harpy’s arm off the harpy screamed in pain and said "BAD SNACK!!! ME EAT YOU" and she plunged toward Aurora and slashed at her with her remaining arm, but Aurora plunged the sword again into the Harpy’s stomach and as she screeched in pain one last time she turned into golden dust.
Two weeks later was her fourteenth birthday, although she did nothing for it as she was treating to her wounded tutor who was more injured than first appeared she had a massive slice in her gut that almost reached her intestines and Aurora had to treat it without infecting it. A few months passed before the tutor was able to walk again woth out help.
It was 4 months later and her tutor told Aurora that today was the day they left for camp. Rebecca told her that whatever happened, she was proud to train such an excellent demigod. As they geared up the tutor gave her a reinforced wooden re-curve bow with a quiver and some CB arrows and a pair of CB daggers and told her they used to belong to a friend of hers. He had died during a quest and she kept them around ever since. She thought that Aurora could use them better than she could. Rebecca gave her a quick lesson on how to use them. When they finished, they headed out to the nearest bus station.
Just when Aurora thought she was safe and getting on the bus her tutor dropped her charm bracelet. Aurora passed it off as nothing but when she saw a goat lion thing. To her knowledge it was a chimera. It burnt her tutor to a crisp. The bus drove off while it was happening. No one else saw anything, but Aurora was crying and again filled with rage about how the gods could let this happen. Aurora played back in her head what she tutor told her "Head to Camp Half-Blood, Half-Blood Hill, Farm Road 3.141 Long Island, New York 11954"
Aurora made it to the address as planned. After her first week she was claimed, but also she was sick of the place they glorified the gods making them seem like saints when all the did is let their children die and take credit for the things they did. But one night in the Zephyrus cabin she overheard a conversation between one of the older siblings and a younger one. They were talking about a place called ‘’The Broken Covenant’’ and how they were against the gods feeling curious, she sought her siblings to ask about this place called the ‘’’Broken Covenant’’ when she caught up with them the older sibling said he did not want anything to do with it and left the vicinity while the younger member told Aurora about the place and how he was planning to go there and join up.And after a week they made it safely to the BC where they awaited approval to join.
Personality: Aurora is a introverted mind often described by people as a calm smooth person she loves the night and high places due to the wind flowing freely.She has a fear of crowds and closed spaces as the wind does not like to be restrained. She is sometimes erratic and a wildcard,She does her best to decide and help what she deems good morally whether it be punching a bully or helping a person up even if the world is against her.
Weapons: A recurve bow with CB arrows and a pair of CB daggers
Appearance: Long brown hair
Godly parent: Zephyrus
Mortal Parent: Marine Todduk
Species: Demigod
Why they want to join the BC: She wants revenge because she believes that the Gods were to blame for her mothers death.
What faction you desire to be a part of: Veritum Unitum
Why should you belong to that faction, what are your core beliefs, why does their ideology suit you: Aurora believes that the gods treat mortals and demigods unfairly and do not care for them as true parents should. She also believes that because of this, the gods shouldn't rule. She thinks that a Demi-god would do a better job, as they can span two worlds. Only Demi-gods can know the struggle of the mortal world and the world of the gods.
- That model, Kylie Jenner, is already in use by two users and can't be re-used. Please find another model.
- Hating the gods isn't a reason to join Veritum. It should be more explicitly detailed per the faction's belief, as every BC member hates the gods.
I'll add on more details once you've cleared these issues.
Hug the shore; let others try the deep ~ WoW
- Why would Zephyrus randomly go to a town and act like a commoner? Gods usually target specific mortals as love interests, not seeking them throughout series of illogical events.
- Please list Aurora's age at every monster attack.
- As Zephyrus isn't one of the Big Three, I have trouble understanding why his children would have monster attacks once every couple of months. Kids of the minor gods (any god that isn't in the Big 3) usually have a monster attack once every year.
- About the old lady that took care of her, a lot doesn't make any sense. For instance, it's hard to grasp that a demigoddess could survive until such an old age becaus of monster attacks. Even if she managed to do it, she wouldn't be very adept at fighting monsters anymore.
- Whats the deal with this exotic fish? It seems a tad too vague and improperly formulated to understand.
- That reason to join the VU faction still isn't concrete enough, as it's more of a reason to join the BC overall. Her beliefs should involve Veritum Unitum's ideology instead of being so general.
- Lastly, kindly fix grammar errors, as there are many of them in your claim.
This may seem rather overwhelming, but I've tried my best to only list the essential issues. Any questions you may bear will be answered ASAP.
Hug the shore; let others try the deep ~ WoW
The hellhound wouldn't likely attack a mortal for no reason, it would mostly tend to aim demigods as prey. A lot of the issues still haven't been fixed such as her recurrent monster attacks (of which shouldn't be so numerous since she's not a child of the Big 3), the exotic fish concept that came out of the blue (since, you know, they own a flower shop and not some aquarium), the faction reasoning and the grammar.
Hug the shore; let others try the deep ~ WoW
Waves, I really don't know what more u want me to put for her beliefs. That is the basic of it. She wants revenge because the gods never really cared for her or her mother or Rebecca. She joins VU because that makes the most sense.... so............. I'm really confused......... ;.; VU
She still doesn't have to have monster attacks so repetively (every three months as you put it) for a child of a very minor god. Once a year is good and it would help make your character older if it is desired. The reasoning needs to fit the specific idealogy, VU's being to overthrow the gods and have no ruler except for themselves. Grammar is still, once again, noticable and distracting.
Hug the shore; let others try the deep ~ WoW
I will do the Reason at a later date, Is the grammar okay now? -NataliaDumbledore
I suppose since this isn't Camp Half-Blood SA's Wiki, the current grammar/orthograph is toleratable. As for the reasoning, take your time, you just have to add in that the VU doesn't want any immortal rulers and blah blah. But since the main claim's issues are fixed, you get accepted to join the BC, just not the VU yet. :)
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