Name: Brianna Jade
God Parent: Aphrodite, Athena (if you choose her I'll edit the history etc.) Demeter
Mortal Parent: Jordan Jade
Personality: Loves cute things, determined to make everyone cute, rarely serious.
History: Jordan Jade was a charming man, always the bachelor, doing one night stands and getting drunk with his friends until he met a woman, who introduced herself as Bethany Harding, who of course flirted back when he went for her, or as his friends put it 'hunted her' and eventually after too many drinks, he invited her over to his apartment and clothes went off, but after the night was over he couldn't seem to get that woman out of his head, he didn't know why, she was prettier than most girls he had met but still there was no reason he could have...fallen in love with her, but he wasn't sure, he has never felt this much emotion to someone before.
Eventually he went on with his life, changing his ways, becoming a business man, steadily getting more and more money than when he was a teenager where he use to always rely on his rich parents money, much to her friends surprise and disappointment. A couple of months later he found a baby girl on his door step with a note saying 'Brianna Jade -Beth' Jordan instantly took Brianna in realizing that this girl was his daughter.
Brianna grew up spoiled; she always got the dresses she wanted, got all the latest toys. But she was dyslexic which put her behind in schoolwork, much to her father’s disappointment but he loved her anyways. When she was seven she was diagnosed with ADHD a couple of years after being diagnosed with dyslexia, which made her father quite stressed each time he got a hold of her report card. When she was eleven she was walking down a park like she always does, when a huge monster appeared out of the gardens (hellhound) and tried to attack her but a child of Hermes was near her and he decided to help her out and killed the monster but Brianna was knocked out in the process, and when she woke up there was no sign of the demigod. Though she was spoiled, she never had any friends and use to always play with soft toys or her maid.
She had woken up in the hospital where the child of Hermes had taken her, she was not taken too camp as the son of Hermes as she was to young to go to camp, finding out she had broken multiple bones and bruises had already formed. No one believed her when she had explained, not even Jordan, her father, did and eventually after Brianna keeping on insisting that it was real she was sent to a psychologist. Brianna hated him on the spot.
Brianna kept on going there for at least six months but still insisted that the monster was real, much to everyone's annoyance and conclusion that she was too spoiled and just wanted attention. So in the end Brianna stopped going there (much to her satisfaction) but Brianna stopped getting the dresses, her father eventually sent her off to a boarding school for kids with disadvantages at the age of thirteen.
She spent a couple of years there at the boarding school, and she was thirteen at the beginning, getting okay marks for a demigod, not making many friends, even there she was made an outcast with the people around her, she wasn't attacked but when she was fifteen she was attacked by a hellhound and nearly died if one of her classmates didn't save her, the classmate ended up being a son of Athena who had been dealing with the monsters who had been entering the building so Brianna didn't really get attacked but this monster had gotten past him because the guy was dealing with another monster and overlooked this one but after the battle, her classmate, deciding to take her to camp, as the school was about to break up for holidays, snuck her out of the school and since the demigod had money due to his father being a lawyer, he had enough money to buy two tickets to camp, but no monsters attacked her whilst getting there and Brianna has stayed ever since receiving the weapons in camp and was fifteen at that age.
Weapons: A sword and dagger in each hand
Goddess' gestation periods are shorter than mortals, more like 4-5 months. How did the satyr and the demigod beat the monster?17:46, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
How'd she get through those 4 years (twelve to sixteen) without a monster attack?
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Aphrodite's cabin is currently full. Please change some portions of the history in order to suit the next godparent choice. You also have yet to answer how she managed to go for four years with few attacks when it is in those four years (twelve to sixteen) when a demigod's powers kick in. She also would have been unable to fight the monsters with a regular kitchen knife. Add in the fact that she never got proper training, it would be unrealistic to emerge with very few injuries. Also, kindly fix up the last paragraph a bit as it is rather hard to understand.
The model your using, Olivia Holt, is already in use, so you should change it, sorry.
Do you still plan on working on this?
That model is also in use by another user.
Assuming you mixed up the mortal parent's gender. How did she end up breaking bones when you never mentioned her actually getting hurt? The part from when she went to boarding school onwards is really confusing, if she was at the boarding school for 4 years, then she'd be a senior, and a lone satyr couldn't possibly fight off monsters that frequently.
Are you still working on this?
How old is she?
Up at the top you put she's 18, but at the bottom of the history you put that she's 17 when she got to camp, where was she for the last year then? Because she can't already have been at camp for the last year. Also, you are too vague about all these supposed monster attacks prior to 17, if surviving monster attacks were that easy, they wouldn't need camp to begin with.
How could an untrained demigod fend off monsters?
Just fix the gender confusion on the first paragraph. Also, the timeskips seems very long and rather confusing. I mean she spet four years at boarding school and you mentioned that four years later she was still there. Also, please add a little more about her early childhood. Just fix these stuff and you'll be ready to go.
What monster was her old psychologist that it took half an hour before it could be defeated? Also, it says she arrived at Camp when she was 17 but it says in the portion before the history that she is 18. Which is it, then: 17 or 18? Please keep in mind that claims are, essentially, the first time your character is arriving at Camp.
Since there are now two demigods in the boarding school, including a satyr, more monsters should have come after Brianna, what with the scent(s) growing stronger. Am I correct in understanding then, that the demigod son of Athena managed to defeat all of these monsters?
How exactly would her mother be able to know "instantly" whose baby she was carrying given her history prior to her encounter with Brianna's father?
How did there just happen to be enough tree nymphs right near by the attack to do something about it, nymphs aren't nearly as powerful as a demigod and generally wouldn't have celestial bronze weapons on them
Who's Francesca? Also, if she was attacked multiple times but was saved by the son of Athena, how come he (the son of Athena) never told her of why she was being attacked? Why didn't he bring her to Camp if he had realized earlier on that she was a demigod?
If the monsters attacked for years and she was continuously saved, why not just bring her to Camp? And the demigod, who kept on saving Brianna, what happened to him/her?
Chiron is no longer at Camp, as he is a canon char and it has been agreed on that all book characters will no longer be at Camp. Our Camp Director is Alexander the Great. If the man in black was an on a mission, how did he find the time to come to the boarding school and coincidentally save Brianna?
If the guy wasn't at Camp and was at school, how was he on a mission for Alexander? What age was she when she started going? If she was a child of Aphrodite it wouldn't make much sense for her to only get attacked once a year
I suggest picking all female gods or all male gods. Because you have one female and two male. This way it makes things less complicated.
If that demigod wasn't in camp how did Alexander the Great know him?
I have mentioned in the last paragraph that the demigod was in camp for 3 yrs prior to the mission, Alexander would have known him in that time.
11:47, November 8, 2013 (UTC)
Okay so I'm confused >< I noticed the same problem as Riri. Who is Jordan really? The father or the demigod? Also, the thing about getting attacked by a monster once a year, just make it 'twice' a year to be more appropriate because if she's gonna approved as a child of Aphrodite, the goddess is an Olympian, which means she's considered as a major deity. And, well, children of major deities don't just get attacked once a year.
Although part of Kit's statement was true, Brianna would have been attacked more along the years, attacks becoming more frequent as life carried on. Not just two a year.
If they just flirted, how was the baby conceived XD? And why didn't the son of Athena just take her to camp
I suggest adding ages through the history.
The second last paragraph's really confusing >.<
1. Why was Jordan sent to the school to retrieve a single demigod if there was already a satyr there?
2. The scent of two demigods and a satyr would have attracted more monsters
3. How long was Jordan at the school?
Why didn't the child of Hermes take her to camp when she was attacked and injured? Why didn't the guy dressed in black take her to camp the first time he saved her?
How did she get to the hospital after the hellhound attack? Had the Hermes child taken her?
Almost there. Just explain why the Hermes kid did not bring her to camp right after the attack happened since I think he would know that Brianna is one of them :)
01:15, December 12, 2013 (UTC)
The son of Hermes would have known that is wasn't safe for Brianna in the mortal world, and should have taken her to camp straight away, especially as there was no evidence that the child had a protector.
Was she attacked between the ages 11 and 15? Because it isn't stated a second attack since that particular one.
Now, why was she not attacked? Being a demigod she would obviously be attacked a lot >.<
The books say that childron of Aphrodite are generally ignored by monsters >.<
Almost there :)) In their journey to Camp, did any other monster attack? What age was she when she arrived at Camp? Then regarding her weapons, did she get this at Camp?