Name: Jack Winters
Gender: Male
God Parent: Boreas, Aeolus, Zeus
Mortal Parent: Ezra Winters
Age: 19
Appearance: Jack is a good looking man, with black hair and eyes. His hair is always in a mess and he doesn't seem have plans to fix it. Most often, he wears the camp shirt, but sometimes he wears different colored shirts with the camp logo on it.
Personality: Jack is a happy go lucky guy. He won't miss a chance to mess around. He often enjoys playing with other kids and campers. He also a bit naive with the new things around him, since he was frozen in a block of ice for so long. He never takes things too seriously and often intends interrupt serious talks. He also can be a bit of a flirt sometimes and often talks beautiful ladies.
History:
A knife, a girl's scream for help, a titan, and ice. Those were the things that Jack saw before he died. He really didn't know how death really felt like. It felt cold, empty, and painless? No. It wasn't it. Death is always painful. So, why doesn't he feel anything at all? He wondered as he waited at DOA Recording Studios. He waited for so long there, he loses track of time. He got tired of waiting and decided to walk to the man on the deck. Before he could say anything, the man spoke. "What are you doing here?" He was about to say he is dead but the man cut him off again. "But you are not dead." Jack frown. Not dead? "Yes, not dead. So, you should get back to your body." Before he could ask how, he was sucked out like a vacuum and was taken out of the Studio, taking him somewhere unknown.
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Balthazar is running for his life. No, there are no monsters after him and it is no immoral being either. What is chasing him are stags. Not magical or immortal stags, normal, but mad stags. You might be wondering, why are stags attacking him. Well, Balthazar, or Bal for short, is cursed to be attacked by wild animals at random times. The son of Hermes got this curse along with his mother from the moon goddess Artemis, who died before he could know her. He was stabbed by a stag once and he doesn't want to be stabbed again, especially if there are nine of them after him. Bal has to find options, or else he is dead. Lucky for him, there was a cave nearby. The entrance is small, so even if the stags will find him, they won't get it. Without any other option, he went inside.
The first thing that Bal felt in the cave was the cold. Caves are often cold, but this one is freezing cold. As if it was a giant refrigerator. The next thing that he saw was the ice. Yes, real giant ice and not just any ice, but glowing giant ice. They look like natural night lights. Amazed with what he sees, Bal moved forward and hoped that there is an exit on the other side. What he did find wasn't an exit, but a giant ice, but unlike the other shards of ice around him, this one his covering the other side and it was red, not blue. As he when closer to the red ice, he saw that there was a human inside that is wearing a shirt that has a logo of Camp Half Blood.
Shocked, he took out Eden and turned it into a hammer. He smashes the ice several times before it breaks apart. He manages to take out the body, but with a few pieces of ice still attached to him. He checked the place and found that the human is still alive. He was about to celebrate when he notices a dagger stabbed into the body. Wanting to save the teenager, he carried him back to the entrance. He could try running back to camp, but it is a bit far from where he is. He checked if the stags are gone before looking around for sunlight for his Iris message.
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--Dream--
The first thing he saw was darkness. Not the “Oh, it is dark in here. Better turn on the lights” darkness, but the “I am blind! Someone help me” darkness. He was about to scream like that too when a bright light hit him. When he opened his eyes, he was in a city. He looked around and felt like his was home. Little did he know that the snowy city of Boston was supposed to have tall skyscrapers, not old brick buildings.
He walked passed two fancy dressed men who were discussing about throwing tea crates in the harbor. He wanted to ask what they were talking about when he passed through them. Shocked, he wondered if he was still a ghost. He touched the wall, but found that he can still feel them. So, why he can’t touch humans? He wandered around, hoping he would find answers, but stopped when he found someone on the snowy alleyway of a tavern. A woman, who was a bit older than him, was trying to keep herself warm. He wanted to help her, but he would only pass right through her. The woman was starting to fall asleep, and Jack knew it was a bad idea. Falling asleep in the snow can kill, whether you are a demigod or not. He was about to panic when a man appeared and aided the woman and Jack gasped from what he was seeing.
He looked exactly like Jack, except for his outfit and long and clean hair. He took the woman in his arms and carried her away. He wanted to follow them when a hand grabbed his wrist. The first thing the struck him was not the fact that the hand was from a woman, nor that the woman was extremely strong, but the fact that her hands were ice cold. He turned and found a woman who he knows all too well. “Hello, brother. It is good to see you after all these years.” Khione told him.
Khione smiled at him as he hugged his godly half-sister. He then broke the hug and asked. “What are you doing here? And where exactly am I?”
“You are in one of my memories, Jack. My memory of how our father met your mother.” She told him. He gasped. “That is my mother?” He said, still shock that he didn’t recognize that it was her mother right away. She nodded sadly. “It is so sad that you don’t remember her completely. But, father told me that you can only remember her name and her looks before you left her for camp.”
The scene changed and Jack was looking a younger version of himself with a younger version of the goddess of snow saying goodbye to his mother. “Of course, you wouldn’t remember this. You were so young when we left your mom.” The goddess told him. His mom kissed his forehead and waved him goodbye. Jack frowned. “I don’t get it. Why I was with you?” Khione chuckled, in a cold but calm way. “I was always there with you. From your first battle with the Hellhound till you got to camp, I have been always there by your side.” She said as the scene changed with Jack going inside the camp.
“I don’t get it. Why do you want to help me all the time? Why do you care so much about me? You were supposed to be hating me for being a son of your father to someone else!” He yelled at her. “I can’t help it, Jack! You made me feel different. You make me feel like a little girl every time I look at you.” She told him with her cold voice as she advanced towards him. “I want you, Jack Winters. I want you so badly.” She started to move her lips towards him and he couldn’t resist but to move his lips as well.
They were about to kiss when Jack stopped himself. “No, I can’t. This is wrong and you know it.” He told her, while backing away. She looked at him with her cold eyes and said, with a sad tone. “Oh, I wished you weren’t my brother. I couldn’t have made you mine forever. But, alas! The Fates are so cruel to me!” She looked at the sky and turned back at him.
“It is time for you to be awakened from your slumber, my brother.” She told him. “But I haven’t—“ He was about to reply when she stopped him. “NO! I can't tell you how or why you were frozen, Jack. Father said not to tell you. You need to go. NOW!” He was about to protest when he realized that he is starting to fade. The last thing that he saw his half-sister were just five words: “I love you, Jack Winters.”
--Dream Ended--
Jack wanted to ask more about his past, but he was forced to wake up after the dream. He looked around at the people looking at him. Random questions came all at once. "Where are you from?", "Why are you wearing a camp shirt?", "Is your hair real?", "Who is your godly parent?" He wanted to answer all of their questions. The only problem is that he couldn't because he couldn't even remember anything aside from his name, his mom's and father's name, and a certain sister of his whom he could never love.
Weapons: Staff
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 16:55, January 24, 2014 (UTC)
Comments[]
Please do provide a weapon so that if you do put one after it's claim it helps to avoid any OP weapon(s). Also provide 3 god choices in the order of your preference (You'll most likely get claimed for a child of Boreas though). The history is interesting; however, the problem I see is that there are a lot of plot holes in it, that can leave readers confused. by Balthazar are you talking about your character, Balthazar Bane? If it is then not everyone has read the history of Balthazar and you should give a brief summary of who he is. If not then pelase explain who he is? Where is the approxmite area the cave Balthazar found Jack is? How was did Jack get frozen in the ice and how long was he frozen? Also how did he get stabbed by a knife and when? It would help if you's also write about his life, pre-getting frozened (Such as how his parent met, his early childhood, his first monsetr attack, and how he got to camp) to further explain about your current written history.
Are you the food? No, we are the hunter! ~Eren Jaeger (Kevin)
Ok, I think I will edit a few words. However, about the pre-getting frozen period, I intended to make his background unknown. This is so that the readers will imagine what his possible past is. But I don't intend to hide it forever. He will get his memories back, little by little.
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 16:48, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
Please ignore HiddenRealm's comment since he does not have authorization to comment on claims.
Are you the food? No, we are the hunter! ~Eren Jaeger (Kevin)
OK.. So, my claim is good now?
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 15:53, January 26, 2014 (UTC)
Please provide three godly choices.
❀"If you can dream it ,you can do it." ~Walt Disney ❀
Done
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 07:48, January 27, 2014 (UTC)
As what Kevin has mentioned above, the history is interesting. For me, it is, in fact, very interesting. However, you are not able to give details on how his parents met, his early childhood and his first monster attack also the reason why he was frozen. Despite the fact that he forgot what happened to him in the past, you should still mention the info needed in a claim.
Smile and wave, boys. Now that's the worst disguise ever. ~Alias Kit
Thanks for the compliment. Yeah, I am really considering the fact that I should just put the whole history.. However, there is this thing with Jack's story.. If I write down the whole history, there is a strong possibility that story will become dull and boring.. is it ok if I just mention a bit of his history? Like how his dad met his mom and how he came to camp before he was frozen? I can't pretty much say about his childhood, his first monster, or how he was frozen because it will really make him boring..
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 07:07, January 31, 2014 (UTC)
Yeah, I get the point of not mentioning those stuff however, you have to comply with the rules of the wiki so you really have to put the info. Um... one paragraph for each (parent meeting, early childhood, first monster attack, how he first got to camp) will do and you don't have to go all that detailed.
Smile and wave, boys. Now that's the worst disguise ever. ~Alias Kit
Wow.. you guys are making this a bit hard for me.. hahahaha.. Ok then, challenge accepted.. Now, is it ok if I say those info in POV style? I think I know how to give the right info without showing you guys everything and ruin his story..
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 07:18, January 31, 2014 (UTC)
If you feel that this would elaborate the history more, while keeping everything in control (like how everything would not sound confusing etc), then please do.
Without moving a muscle, I’m chained up. HYU {{{1}}}
Done..
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 16:42, February 2, 2014 (UTC)
please put jack's current age.
“Oh my glob!! Drama bomb!”~Pandora
done
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 01:49, February 6, 2014 (UTC)
Over all this claiming isn't bad but its format seems cluttered and confusing. There're also a number of instances of changed tense and questionable grammar. Plus I should note that I can't quite shake off the impression that this character is HEAVILY inspired by Jack Winters (Frost) from a recent Disney movie. Personally I wouldn't accept this claim because it doesn't do a very good job of imparting the character's story clearly and effectively. That said, I'm really picky and so I'm sure someone else will. Maybe take a look over the things I mentioned and if you want more specifics let me know.
Flamefang (talk) 05:57, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
sorry about the grammar btw... my grammar checking app is broken and I suck at writing in past tense.. the format.. well.. I made it into something like that so that the readers will understand the point of view of the characters, which are Bal's and Jack's..
and finally.. about the Jack Winters being almost like Jack Frost.. to be honest.. I made this chara to be just like him, by looks.. but that was before I knew about the voting thing and the banning of models.. as soon as I found out about it.. I immediately looked for a pic that is good for his carefree persona.. and Toby was perfect for it.. I haven't change the appearance info though as this model is not yet approved.. so, as soon as he gets the approval.. I will edit that right away..
story wise.. though you are right that Jack was frozen in ice is like what happen to Jack Frost, it isn't a copy of what happen in RotG.. This is actually simillar to what happen to Thalia Grace: He died protecting someone but instead of completely dying, was frozen for many years..
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 06:25, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
Why would he be in DOA if he hadn't died? Did he (Jack) fight in the titan war? Why would Artemis have cursed a son of Hermes? Khione has heaps of half-siblings, and in the books she doesn't seem to show affection to anyone related to her father, so why would she now? Please elaborate on Jack's early childhood. How did Jack get to camp exactly? I understand up to where Bal was going to send an IM. what happened after that?
Bring me the Moon and Stars - Bird 07:50, February 15, 2014 (UTC)
About the DOA, it is just like Gwen's case. Only that Jack wasn't able to get to the boat. He was one of those lost soul who got stuck waiting in the main deck for many years. So, he doesn't have a clue if he is alive or not.
for more info about why Bal was cursed by Artemis.. check this link.. http://camphalfbloodroleplay.wikia.com/wiki/Balthazar_Bane
Gods are random.. everyone knows that.. they do what they want and fall in love whoever they think is good for them.. heck, they even go with the same gender once in a while.. Khione is no exception.. She likes Jack.. So, she will want to try being with him..
His childhood and how he entered the camp, like I said, is small on purpose.. but I did say some major info.. like how he left his mom, his first kill, etc..If you look at in carefully, you can assume that he came to camp the same way as everyone else did: Ran into a monster, kills it, safely went to the boarders. Also, by reading the story completely, readers can assume that Bal IM'ed the camp for help and was taken back to camp without any problem.
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 03:20, February 16, 2014 (UTC)
So was Jack's suspended animation situation similar to Aang's from Avatar where he aged chronologically but he still appeared to be 12? Or is he now 19 biologically as well as chronologically? Because if it is the latter, his age should just outright state that he is 19. If it is the former, his age should just say Biological Age: 16, Chronological Age: 19.
"No wind is of service to him that is bound for nowhere." -Wind
No, it is like Thalia's situation before where she was turned into a tree and came back a bit older.. Like she died 13 but came back 15.. Jack, on the other hand, died 16 but came back 19..
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 16:18, February 22, 2014 (UTC)
In that case his age should say 19 and not 16. If you want you can add a parentheses saying that he thinks he is 16 but the official age should be 19. Age is not a thought after all.
"No wind is of service to him that is bound for nowhere." -Wind
ok... I will edit that right now..
Dudungbrader "I only hate Artemis, not her hunters." 16:23, February 22, 2014 (UTC)
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"No wind is of service to him that is bound for nowhere." -Wind