Name: Jared Daniels
God Parent: Hermes, Poseidon, Ares
Mortal Parent: Samantha Daniels James DanielsAppearance: ||||
Personality: Easy going, smart, loves to joke, he has a hard time being serious
History: Samantha Daniels works in his basement inventing things, but yet they all failed and for that she was made an outcast with everyone. One day at an expo and she was showing his (failed) experiments she met a man with grey eyes and brown hair and they had gotten into a conversation. Samantha was an eccentric woman and practically no one could keep up with him but yet the man did much to Samantha's surprise.
Eventually Samantha got the nerve to ask her to his lab to see if she could help him with his current experiment and she agreed, and after that they continued to work on his experiments, the man giving him a few helpful tips here and there. A few weeks later a doorbell rang and he opened the door to find Jared in a golden carriage with the man not in sight and with a not only saying to call him Jared. Jared always helped his mom with his experiments and was home schooled, and shared his mother’s love for inventing.
He grew up homeschooled barely leaving his home other than running errands for his father, and by the time he was twelve he always encountered monsters which he only lived by the attacks because he just ran for his dear life. He barely had any friends and always low on money as no one really wanted what his father made. He grew up in New York and when he was a child he always was the one selling the newspapers on the corner to get some little cash he could scrape from the meagre selling’s he could get.
There was a corner shop where Jared use to sell the newspaers led my a young man around 25, the man was always running about the shop making sure everything is in order. The man told Jared that he was ADHD so that was he was always up and about. Anyway when he turned twelve, strange stuff started to happpen. He was attacked by monsters, some times he was wounded by the monsters as he had tried to run, most of the time they were hellhounds but some where homeless cyclopses. But most of the time they were killed by the man inside the shop, but always the man would say 'its not time' when Jared asked about the monsters and what they wanted from him.
five years later, after moving around towns since his father was always looking for jobs, Jared was at a temporary school when he got a new a janitor and for the next two months he got the sense that the Janitor was watching him and when his maths teacher turned out to be a monster, the janitor saved him and afterwards the janitor dragged him into a car and drove off explaining everything about the Gods. It took them a month to get to camp, as they were on the other side of the country and the satyr had spent all his money on food and shelter. Most of the time they were fending off the monsters and the rest, taking night shifts when the other was asleep, though the satyr took longer turns as Jared was under skilled, but Jared always managed to wake up the satyr when a monster did come, and together they managed to kill the monsters but barely.
They got to know each other well and the satyr taught Jared the basic fighting skills to fend off the monsters when they came, though Jared could never do it without the satyrs help, and in return Jared gave the satyr small machines that could help him with the reeds, by making the notes stronger and louder and more forceful. The satyr had run out of money beforehand so they couldn't use a plane, and he arrived at camp when he was sixteen.
Weapons: a trident or a sword
Two more god parent choice please. Why didn't the satyr take him to camp after the first attack? And why a trident weapon if he's not a child of Poseidon?
A satyr cannot beat a monster without the help of a demigod.
Why did the satyr just leave?
Your first choice is Hermes, but the lead guy/parent is a guy o.o
Are you still going to work on this?
Okay so, I'm a bit confused. First off, his mortal parent's a male... but all your godly choices are males as well. That, in and by itself, is ridiculous because males don't give birth >.< It's also a rather big jump from a few days old to 10 years old so, kindly add more to the childhood. Why wasn't a replacement satyr sent when the previous satyr was called for a different mission? Also, Chiron (and all the other book characters) are no longer at Camp. our Camp Director is Alexander the Great. Also, in a span of five years, having only one monster attack is very unlikely, especially when the demigod's at the ages of 12-16 and moreso if he's a child of a Major Olympian.
Please try to be serious when making your claim, "Female jks Male" isn't funny or cute. You still need to add information about the timespan from when he was dropped off in the carriage and then ten years later. Give some childhood history. Julia started to growl and her dog turned into a foaming monster??? Why is Samantha disappointed with him for coming home empty handed? The last Paragraph, is a major run on sentence please try to fix that. Jared is 14 when the last attack happens, If he's 16 when he gets to camp, what happens in that time frame?
I'd like to know why you signed the claim so many times. Also, I don't suggest on you time skipping the part between first meeting her and suddenly a child at the door. I don't think the man would be that easy to have a woman of respect come to his house and instantly seed her. Give something creative that they did with a small time frame to lead up to the birth of Jared Daniels (I keep wanting to write Jack Daniels ><). How did Jared always help his mom with his experiments? Athena is likely no where to be found. Yet again, his godparent is a female so he wouldn't be living with Athena. He would be with the father, James. So he would have to run errands for his father. Give ages for time frames. Also, monsters are relentless -- they wouldn't just poof away after a little while even if a kid was out of reach due to a hiding place. You make it seem like he is six, which seems a tad young for a monster attack. Do you have a species for the dog that morphed into a monster? Possibly a hellhound? Make things logical and explained. This claim seems to be done in haste and not very well-thought out. And who is Samantha and why was she not surprised or even asked how Jared got all the cuts and bruises? Also, I hardly think that the camp would send a satyr away from an assignment. If need be and they were short -- they would have brought Jared to camp before going onto another assignment. You are going to need to fix a lot of spelling errors and fix your punctuation. ^^ I'm sorry for making this so long. But that model was voted too famous to be used. You will need to find another. I apologize.
uhm yeah, the model you're trying to use was voted too famous
Waitwaitwait, I think you got the mortal parent section mixed up, and I'm confused as to how he helped his mother with her experiments if she left... Unless you're still doing it to the female godparent? Or...?
How old was he when the first monster attacked?01:43, August 25, 2013 (UTC)
Athena wouldn't fall in love, the only reason she has kids is through her head from a mutual thing between her and the father.
I'd say ten's too early for an attack, 12 would be good. That way you don't have to have him run away, which's getting an unlikely in his case
Explain what those two years getting to camp were like.
You still have to fix the pronouns since his mom's Athena. How'd he get through three years without monster attacks?
10's too early for a child of Athena. Monsters would've sniffed him out at 12-13, 14 being the latest. If the corner and run-away attacks are from ages prior to 12-13, you can remove them (they're not all that realistic anyway). How'd he get through those three years without monster attacks and no training with a proper CB weapon? And your claim still says Samantha, even though the godparent's Athena now. Now, I don't know if Athena can have children with women since she doesn't exactly have intercourse, but it is something really fun to ponder about XD
Why didn't they just take a plain to Long Island?12:30, September 1, 2013 (UTC)
What ages was he attacked (when he had to hide in corners), how old was he when he got to camp? It's important to add ages to significant events such as monster attacks and getting to Camp to your claim.
So what, the monsters just gave up chasing him? every single time? I mean it's understandable if he ran into a crowded area and they stopped, but just giving up like that? To me it seems unlikely because the monster (depending on what it is) would have a larger stamina level, and would most likely be able to catch up to Jared.
Can you please just find another, more likely, way for him to avoid monsters? Maybe have him find a friend who's a demigod, or Idk just something as unrealistic as that corners thing. That should be it >.< Then claiming finallllyyy :)