Name: Kaitlyn Sanchez
God Parent: Aphrodite, Iris, or Nike
Mortal Parent: Mark Sanchez
Current Age: 14, Almost 15
Personality: Kaitlyn is outgoing and always laughing. She has a sassy side and her ADHD tends to make her mouth go off before her brain.
History: Mark met her mother when he bumped into her on the way out of a failed date from a girl his best friend had set up for him. He had been thinking of his college homework, so he wasn't paying attenion. On a whim, he asked her out. She accepted and they met the next night for dinner. For several weeks, they went out until the night she told him she would have to leave. Mark was told she had to leave the city she'd been visiting. They spent one night together and she vanished. Until several months later, a baby appeared on the steps with a letter saying she was his. His parents had left him their ranch when they died, so they moved there.
Kaitlyn grew up in Austin, Texas on her dad's ranch. She had few friends with her trouble with school. Her dad married a mortal women when she was six. Jenny acted as a mother to Kaitlyn, but never tried to replace her birth mother. Her childhood was simple, playing with their two dogs and learning to ride a horse. She loved to go shopping with Jenny and playing princess. The things every little girl does.
Her first monster attack was when she was thirteen. She was walking home with her best friend, Lily. Lily was a demigod who had been attending camp every summer since she found out she was a demigod, therefore had training and was able to mainpluate the mist. A hellhound attacked them and Lily killed it. She used the mist to make Kailtyn think a rabid dog attacked them. When she told her dad, he told her not to walk home anymore even with a friend. She relied on the bus or her dad driving her after that.
The next year was relatively quiet. Lily moved to camp for all year, so Kaitlyn's scent wasn't strong enough to be attacked without Lily. She met Jake Tucker, a satyr. He lead her to Camp Half Blood soon after. There were several attacks on her way to camp, mostly hellhounds or empousa. Kaitlyn managed to defeat them with help from Jake. Jake helped her understand a bit more about the Greek World, with her being clueless. They became better friends and she was always hapy to talk to him. Jenny and Mark didn't believe her at first, but eventually realized she was telling the truth. However, Kaitlyn knew that it freaked them out, so she stays at camp year-round.
Weapons: Her main weapon is a bow and arrow. Kaitlyn also uses two knives of celestial bronze. She wears the knives on her right ankle and left wrist. The strap is made by a Hecate child, making it invisble and weightless. She got them from Camp Half Blood's armory.
Overall, this was well done, but I feel as if it was a bit..rushed. If you could perhaps expand on the journey to Camp, that'd be great. What I mean is, were there any attacks on the way? Any conversations that might have impacted her backstory significantly? It's too easy to say that they reached Camp safely (I have done it myself as well in the past). Also, could you please provide a few more details on how the parents met? It was a bit...forced, the way you wrote it. ~Moodle, Yours to command (Sig WIP).
First of all, please sign under your claim with the four tildes ~
You cannot simply kill a hellhound with a barrel.
How was she able to survive three years alone? You've already mentioned that similar incidents have happened. So, kindly explain how she managed to survive. If you'll look at it, it would be hard for her since she's untrained.
Which of the weapons you've mentioned is her main weapon? Please specify. Thank you :)
12:23, November 28, 2013 (UTC)
A hellhound cannot simply be scared off by a scream or a mortal. It IS a monster. It doesn't easily get terrified. And you've said that after her first monster attack that incidents have happened for the next three years. How was she able to survive especially when she was untrained and alone?
A dagger cannot be used as a main weapon. It is just for a secondary weapon.
03:27, November 30, 2013 (UTC)
Was Lily trained in any way? if not then she probably couldn't kill the hellhound.
I suggest you make the bow and arrow her main weapon since knives, daggers and the like aren't used for main weapons (in this wiki that is).
You've mentioned something about strange people following her. Who are those people in particular? Are they monsters? Weird demigods? Who?
Almost there d(^-^)
10:18, December 6, 2013 (UTC)
Scent doesn't exactly work like that. It sort of appears once they realise they're a demigod, before that hey don't give off much scent at all. So if the monsters were able to smell her at all they would have attacked.
The image you are using for your character is in use by another user who had the image in use first in her claim. Unless you have (or get) permission to use this model, you'll need to change it.
This claim is short but sweet *thumbs up* Just add a few details about her early childhood coz you skipped to when she was already 13.
05:22, December 17, 2013 (UTC)
How was Lily able to control the mist? How did she get the training? Also, in the last paragraph, you said Lily did this and Lily did that, when I think you meant Kaitlyn. And the last paragraph confuses me. It says she's been at Camp for a year, then it said Jake lead her there. Could you mind cleaning that up?
How did the father go from being a college student having to raise a kid on his own to owning a ranch?
Aphrodite's Cabin is now full, so you character would be claimed to the next godpaent choice, is that okay?
Kindly add a bit more to her childhood. If you could add in anything about monster sightings at an age close to thirteen, it would be really helpful. Next, when did she know Lily? Also, if both Lily and her were demigods, this would cause more monsters to be attracted to the area. If Kaitlyn wasn't allowed to walk home anymore, how did she get home when no means of transportation was ever stated? How did Jake and Kaitlyn escape from/defeat the mosnters which attacked them? How/where did she acquire her weapons? Also, what exactly does she wear on her right ankle and wrist?
Is Lily a character already on the wiki?