Name: Kyla Young
God Parent: a Clear sighted Mortal/Huntress of Artemis
Mortal Parent: Ashlee(daughter of Mnemosyne), Zach Young (Son of Morpheus)
Personality: Kyla is normally bubbly, but she can switch to serious mode faster than you can say 'love'. She is okay with boys, thinking of them as friends, but never more than that. However, she CAN be quite cold to them. She hasn't quite recovered from her heartbreak, and will get snappy if you mention it to her.
Ashlee and Zach met at the beach in camp. They chatted for a while, and got ice cream. They went swimming in the ocean, and playfully pushed each other over. One thing led to another, and they were kissing passionately underwater. They, uh, brought it too Ashlee's room, and had (I'm not even going to say it).
Kyla had a fairly normal childhood. Her family was attacked by monsters every once in a while, being a little family of demigods, but they had a lot of weapons, and fought them off. Protecting Kyla and Mason (her younger brother) was always the priority. Ashlee and Zach were always able to fend monsters away. They always got a few scratches and bites, but other than Kyla, nobody was ever seriously injured. She was sent to a regular school with normal friends, because, as she wasn't a demigod, monsters wouldn't attack her. School was, of course, difficult, as Kyla had inherited ADHD from her parents. Aside from that, she got fairly good grades. Mason was annoying, as younger brothers are, but she loved him all the same.
Becoming a huntress
When Kyla was fourteen, she dated a boy called Jackson Bloom. He was all she looked for in a guy. Nice, funny, smart. They dated for a year, until Kyla caught him kissing another girl, Miranda. They broke up, and Kyla was heartbroken. So much so, that she talked to her cousin, a huntress, who brought her to see Artemis. Artemis asked her to take the pledge, and Kyla agreed.
Weapons: A silver bow, and CB arrows that have been coated in the same stuff.
Before I really start getting into checking this, I think for now you should just try to flesh out these paragraphs, talk more about her first monster attack, and how they survived these attacks. Talk more about how her parents met. Why did Mnemosyne want her to become a priestess. You said you were a "professional book critique" so that should help you flesh out these paragraphs. Answer the questions you think of when you read this yourself o.o
Hello, me again, sorry about the quick check last time, I had to go do stuff at the time.... anyways I'm gonna do a more thorough check this time around ^ . ^
- I would like to start off saying you cannot be both a priestess and a huntress. Priestess' need to stay at camp in order to do their work as priestesses, and receive words from the gods/goddesses. Meanwhile, Huntresses are loyal to Artermis, lose all their other powers and abilities, and use only those of the huntress', while also leaving camp to go on hunts. HOWEVER you can have her resign her position as priestess in order to become a huntress.
- While their parents may be demigods, the children are not, so they should be completely ignored by the monsters, and they would not be able to wield CB. (she would however gain this ability with huntress powers)
- Priestess' don't date people, so the part for her becoming a huntress would need a different reason.
Okay, I fixed all that. In case your wondering, though, the attacks are at the house are because of the parents. Being demigods and all, especially adults, they would attract a lot of monster attention.
hey there I'll be your claimer today and I have a question...'She called on Artemis?" does this mean she is aware of the demigod world? is she a clear sighted mortal? please explain
She is a Clear sighted Mortal. In answer to your question, yes she does know. I'm not sure how to put this in, but her parents told her about the demigod world.
ok hi again I know this is a minor char but it doenst mean the history can be this short.so please elaborate a bit more on the early history and maybe school?
ok i asked a few people about this...and I dont think kyla can take ambrosia it would kill her and also artemis cant be summon but kyla can find her or a huntress brought her to artemis
I Get the Ambrosia thing. I figured it was a 25% chance of being okay. As for Artemis, I fixed that :)
one last thing to change the harpy attacking a mortal i asked a few people its a no sorry cause harpy main focus are demigods and not mortal regardless of their status